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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 07:19 Post subject: |
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"Ok"
Yes, yes I'm back.
Somewhat.
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HubU
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 09:10 Post subject: |
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Don't go around tonight,
Well, it's bound to take your life,
There's a bad moon on the rise.
"Music washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life." ~Berthold Auerbach
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 11:39 Post subject: |
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is the text based on the thread in bitching spot
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 12:29 Post subject: |
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i like it.
i had a life,
now i have nforce.
how about that?
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 14:13 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 14:38 Post subject: |
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looks great 
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 21:16 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Sun, 12th Jun 2005 22:09 Post subject: |
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just testing my humble signature
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 12:22 Post subject: |
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I think that text is very cliche and corny. I had a love that was blind, my life was taken from me? Lol plz... rest looks good but that text really ruins the entire sig for me.
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 13:12 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 13:18 Post subject: |
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*removed: serves no purpose*
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 14:17 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 20:06 Post subject: |
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Some people like to make tragedy of their lives when it's not half so bad, people like to exxagerate, makes them special, makes them different, especially on the internet. So, I'm sorry if I don't sympathize. But I do like the sig, just not the words.
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nouseforaname
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 21:16 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 21:41 Post subject: |
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| Pizda2 wrote: | | Some people like to make tragedy of their lives when it's not half so bad, people like to exxagerate, makes them special, makes them different, especially on the internet. So, I'm sorry if I don't sympathize. But I do like the sig, just not the words. |
Word!
"Techniclly speaking, Beta-Manboi didnt inject Burberry_Massi with Benz, he injected him with liquid that had air bubbles in it, which caused benz." - House M.D
"Faith without logic is the same as knowledge without understanding; meaningless"
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| Posted: Mon, 13th Jun 2005 22:16 Post subject: |
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| Accelleron wrote: | Allow me to explain it:
"I had a life, but it was taken": Before I got into PC's I used to be much less of a nerd, much more social etc... since the cliche' meaning of "a life" is a social network etc. I used that, although it sounds like something different.
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conclusion: screw the pc shit. get out more, get to meet people. stop whining. in one word: change!
jesus christ was a gangsta rapper. they killed him. he came back and made a platinum album.
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| Posted: Tue, 14th Jun 2005 00:52 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Tue, 14th Jun 2005 01:39 Post subject: |
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There is only room for one depressed attention whore on this here forum!
"Techniclly speaking, Beta-Manboi didnt inject Burberry_Massi with Benz, he injected him with liquid that had air bubbles in it, which caused benz." - House M.D
"Faith without logic is the same as knowledge without understanding; meaningless"
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| Posted: Tue, 14th Jun 2005 05:17 Post subject: |
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haha
Coming from a guy who ‘tries’ to use proper grammar in a poem...
Wow... and
"I put it there because it is the best short-format poem I'd written in a long time."
I'm afraid of seeing your worst, honestly.
"I never even asked any of you to read it."
You did when you created a thread about it.
"And Injurious, stop acting like a depressed attention whore... "you don't know what I went through and never will"... Who gives a fuck dude. You write this bullshit, for whatever reason. I never started to flame you for it. I include a poem in my sig because I like it and feel it's relevant to my life, and all of a sudden you start going up in arms about it..."
Because you have potential in coming up with a GOOD poem. This, right here, is pure shit. If you believe that this is your best and you're unable to deal with the criticism then you should give up on poetry!
The rest of your points are bull shit. Seriously, if you write a poem you want it to be noticed. If you can't take the criticism... then don't write!
"If that is your best attempt at poetry, I hope I will never read anything formally published by you... self-published work usually sucks." 
You need imagination and creativity to write a poem not just proper English.
K… thnx… and... bye…
And I’m not a depressed attention whore, ok. Every time you make a sig it’s about some shitty emotional bull-shit that happened to you and then you get offended when people speak the truth. Honestly… quit with these sigs or accept the fact that you aren’t this person you think you are.
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| Posted: Tue, 14th Jun 2005 11:03 Post subject: |
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| Injurious wrote: | | Every time you make a sig it’s about some shitty emotional bull-shit that happened to you and then you get offended when people speak the truth. Honestly… quit with these sigs or accept the fact that you aren’t this person you think you are. |
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| Posted: Tue, 14th Jun 2005 13:08 Post subject: |
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| Posted: Tue, 14th Jun 2005 15:52 Post subject: |
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| Accelleron wrote: | | No, I didn't use proper grammar. I didn't even try. the comma/period use in the poem is more symbollic than anything else. Just like in a proper english sentence, such as "I walked home, but stopped along the way" the reader is given the impression of a pause. I gave that bit a lot of thought, and found this the best way to go. |
The line break is often used as a comma in poetry.  You don't need grammar to write poetry. Poetry is unstructured. It's illogical. It's emotional. Often when people write poetry it's not to convey happiness, but sadness. You don't write a poem because you got laid last night, but you write a poem about yourself, your feelings, your 'EMOtions". Only when you HAVE to write a poem, and you DON'T have anything to write about, you write about bull shit.
here's an example!
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today,
I woke in the morn with a feeling of joy
The bed was warm, but wind blew chills
Then I pondered to myself
What a great night it must've been
So, I turned to one side
and a goddess I saw
I smiled to her face
And she smiled back
Then I asked her once;
"the fuck you still here"
To that;
She did not reply
Then I told her twice;
"get up, get the fuck out!"
To that;
she yelled
she screamed
So I slit her throat
twas quick and clean
And so now my day started
A long day it'll be
The end!?
"
See... that's poetry... ain't it?
| Accelleron wrote: | | Funny. No, really, you should consider a life as a stand-up comedian. That or an asshole. Wait, nvm. |
There you go being all defensive about it. Honestly... grow the fuck up. Life isn't this world of yours where everyone will cherish you non-existent intellectual mind. Everyone has opinions and you should consider accepting them whether or not these are the opinions you want to hear!
| Accelleron wrote: | | You clicked on a thread in the useless void. You knew what you were here for. |
You still made the thread. There was failure with the last thread and the one before that; people gave a lot of criticisms and you still put out a god damn hussy fit... you honestly thought that if you put it in useless void no one would touch it?
Come on! You're an attention whore!
| Accelleron wrote: | | Please, define "GOOD" poetry. Because to me and anyone else I've encountered, a good poem is one that transmits a certain message or series of messages with the inclusion of more subtleties than normal prose. I did not use allusions in this one, there was no need, or purpose for them. I did use a form of metaphor, and as far as I am concerned, that and the form serve my end. They appear to be the ravings of a depressed lunatic until one has applied some thought to the wording and understood that it is my own perception of my life. I agree, it is dramatic to a degree. But I like it. And even if they are a dime a dozen (something you have given no backing to), I find mine to suit my use for it perfectly. Anyone who shies away from a method of writing because he is afraid that similar work of others will be better, is an attention whore and little else. |
You think your poem is unique? Are you so far up your ass that you can't see the truth? This, now, is a fucking emo era. Poems, like yours, are everywhere. Honestly. You aren't this master-mind who made a unique poem... stop taking the credit. You like it, fine! You love it, even better. But, we are the audience, who is exposed to this trash, so, we actually do have a say about it.
So, quit being a jerk and accept the criticism you do get, don't ignore it because it's not your point of view...
Sorry that I didn't touch your "Good Poem" segment for I found it bland, idiotic and rather long for my liking.
| Accelleron wrote: | | I can take intelligent criticism. Not "this is bullshit" "there are too many" and "it sucks". Make valid points or don't post. |
We went through this (5) times. If you can't take the heat, get the fuck out of the kitchen.
| Accelleron wrote: | | Yes, and your attempt at parody had neither. |
I copied your crappy poem and made it crappier; as you say. I used your gay ass bull-shit... so in all essence you're still commenting on your poem. They weren't your words, they didn't have your shitty charm, but the poem was still yours.
| Accelleron wrote: | | This is my 5th sig on this forum, only 2 of them had any sort of lyric in them. Your point is moot. |
I seem to remember other threads where you threw a hussy fit. And those weren't just sigs with lyrics in them. Remember the infamous 100 dollar bill? How frustrated you got? Or the one after that... same thing.
History repeats it self. Remember that, boy.
| Accelleron wrote: | | The point, as I have said it and continue to, is that I don't care what you think of the poem. |
To care is to listen, to not is to ignore. You've done only one of them. Do you know which?
| Accelleron wrote: | | I was asking for comments on the sig in general, and while I did expect a slightly warmer reception for the poem, I feel no obligation to remove it because some people don't like it. If I'm asked by a mod to remove it, I will. Otherwise, I find it to be a good use of the limited space in my sig. |
By all means keep it there. Just don't get piss-mad about it when some kid laughs at you. Then again previously peer-pressure has showed us that we can make you change your mind...
| Accelleron wrote: | | Compare it with your favorite piece of clothing/furniture/whatever. Your friends tell you to throw it out, that it sucks or it's too old or whatever. Nevertheless, it holds some moral value for you, so you keep it. Same case. |
So this poem is your favorite thing in the whole wide world? It holds extreme moral value to you? It is your soul and your essence put into one? Then I'll have to quote toeffy on this one.
| toeffy wrote: | | conclusion: screw the pc shit. get out more, get to meet people. stop whining. in one word: change! |
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